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Old 07-27-2006, 01:08 PM   #16
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mexicans, I PM'ed you a while back because I read your story in that link you have in your signature.

Well written, need just the slightest bit of work considering typos and near the beginning it is kinda of quick on a small ammount of parts.

But everything else is detailed well and written hella good. =)

This mexican gives many props to mexicans who can write. =D
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Old 07-29-2006, 11:33 PM   #17
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Since I'm quickposting I can't look back a page.

But the 9/11 poem was good, I liked it, and the excellence poem made me lol towards the end. Thanks taka, appreciate it.

Now that I'm back from the Adirondacks, I should start on the next chapter.
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Old 08-29-2006, 07:33 PM   #18
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I do. I am actually working on a vampire story, if anyone's interested in reading it. Fangs and Blood: A Vampire Story
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Old 08-30-2006, 01:31 AM   #19
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When I'm not drooling over pop'n 12, I'm writing. I have a story here, if anyone is interested...it's right here

This story isn't intended for people who can't stand sappy romances...not that it's sappy.
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Old 09-08-2006, 11:17 AM   #20
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Eh, I'm writing too. But the problem is that I'm in the process of working on the first story for the nth time (for quality reasons) and on the second one, the sequel (from the looks of it, I don't have to redo this one). So, it probably won't make sense till it's completed. Zero anyway.

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Old 09-12-2006, 12:27 PM   #21
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I write stories based on The House of the Dead. I don't know why, I do them for school projects in English. I'm only 13 now, just started Year 9. I started with THOTD1 back in Year 7. It was only 19 pages and it was pretty good considering I had never wrote a good story in my life. But in Year 8 I made THOTD2, which kicked ass! 26 pages, and my teacher read them all. I got an A+ AND A MERIT! I'm probably going to start THOTD3 soon.

I would post it up here, but:

1) It only has a 20K character limit here and it's WAY too big.

2) I don't think anyone would bother to read 26 pages.
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Old 09-12-2006, 03:26 PM   #22
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I write stories based on The House of the Dead. I don't know why, I do them for school projects in English. I'm only 13 now, just started Year 9. I started with THOTD1 back in Year 7. It was only 19 pages and it was pretty good considering I had never wrote a good story in my life. But in Year 8 I made THOTD2, which kicked ass! 26 pages, and my teacher read them all. I got an A+ AND A MERIT! I'm probably going to start THOTD3 soon.

I would post it up here, but:

1) It only has a 20K character limit here and it's WAY too big.

2) I don't think anyone would bother to read 26 pages.
Pfft, 26 pages is short for me. My first story is currently 30+ pages, while my other is about 96 so far.

I'll read it.

What's a merit...?
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Old 09-13-2006, 01:06 AM   #23
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Pfft, 26 pages is short for me. My first story is currently 30+ pages, while my other is about 96 so far.

I'll read it.

What's a merit...?
Lol ok I'll post it up one I get my disk back from my teacher.

And a merit is basically a sticker

And woah you must like writing. I would write more but we have a certain amount of time before we have to hand it in, that's why I'm starting THOTD3 early this year.
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Old 09-14-2006, 09:24 AM   #24
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And a merit is basically a sticker
Ohhh. Stickers are awesome.

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And woah you must like writing. I would write more but we have a certain amount of time before we have to hand it in, that's why I'm starting THOTD3 early this year.
And to think it started out of sheer boredom...
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Old 09-20-2006, 06:39 PM   #25
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Wow, I'm suprised this thread is still alive.

My story, at the moment, is about 60 pages, give or take. I'm on chapter 5 right now, working at it. I want it to be around 100k words when I'm done, or more.
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Old 09-23-2006, 10:39 PM   #26
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New chapter!
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Old 10-17-2006, 03:34 PM   #27
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Forget THOTD, this is my latest story (click the title to download (42kb)). The spoiler tells you what the task was, so if yor worried about spoiling it, dont be.


The idea was to create a story where it ended with the characted opening the cupboard. Please tell me if it's any good. I'm 13 and in Year 9.

Lol PARANOiA font.
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Old 11-06-2006, 10:41 AM   #28
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I have two 90+ page screenplays done...

But I'm rewriting it.
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Old 11-07-2006, 10:36 AM   #29
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Crap damn it, I forgot to post the link; a little more accessable.

http://www.fictionpress.com/secure/l...toryid=2254659

I'm not putting up the second one just yet. Also, only 3 hits.
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Please don't flame.. I was depressed one night ( thats not un-normal though ) And decided to take a crack at writing.. I've done other stuff before as well which I was told to try print it out... but I lost it.. Unfortantly..

Please tell me if you like it.. Its a story about a man and a love life... I haven't written anymore to it for awhile now... Just haven't been concentrated on it...

Chapter 1 - A Story of Past...

A man looked down upon by many people walked along a dark road on a late night getaway to get himself away from his sorrows. A couple of days before, he had lost something very dearest to him. He lost the only thing he knew as family.. He lost a young women, and also a best friend. This womens name was never known by anyone but this man, and her parents. Everyone else besides for her parents and this man knew her as "Her". "Her" was very found of this man. They spent many times together, weither or not it was at a local bar, throwing down drinks slowly, and just watching the other intoxicated people stumbling all over themselves, attempting to get to their feet in order to leave. Although they did not think they were drunk, the Man and "Her" knew they were smashed.. the Man and "Her" would sit in those bars.. Laughing, telling of times past, sharing secrets, discussing life in general.. This was always a good topic for the two of them..One night while at a store with "Her" , the man asked while picking up items of his interest, "Are you interested in hanging out by my place tonight?" .. "Her"s response was actaully shocking towards the Man. She stated "Sure! I would love too! But what is there to do? You never invite me to your appartment." "Well.." While removing a long necked bottle from his bag, "I picked this up, I know its your faviorate, and I considered just talking... I recently read the book you told me too.." While walking home from the store with "Her", the man noticed that a stray man was eyeing "Her" down.. She said to the Man, "I see that guy all the time, he looks at me in odd ways.. it actaully scares me.." "Well.." said the man, "Would you like me to say something to him?" "Actaully.. yes." Stated "Her". As the Man walked towards the stray man, the stray man walked around him, not even noticing him. "Excuse me!" yelled the Man as the stray walked away from him. "..Your business?" Asked the stray man, he looked old, although he didn't seem it with his unweathed voice and look in his eyes.

The Man approuched the stray. The stray removed a ciggerette from his box of them, and began to approuch for his lighter. As he did, the Man had already been 2 steps ahead of him, offering the light. The stray took it with a thank you. The Man asked who he was, and where he was from. The stray looked at him with an awed experison on his face. "I'm not from here, Ill resist to mention my past, but I'll tell you who I am.. My name is Geno." The Man looked at him briefly, looked back at "Her" and then went back to a quick look at Geno. "Hello Geno, I'm Rizon, and you can call her "Her". "Well I would think that is rude," Stated Geno, "I would much rather call her by my real name." "Her" came into the picture walking across the street. "You may call me "Her", thats how people know me, thats how you will know me.. for know." "I'm very sorry, "Her", stated Geno, "Please excuse me for my rupture, but I must be going." Rizon running after Geno stated "Sire! Please join us in a drink across the street, for new times sakes." Geno looked back at Rizon and "Her" and such his head approving a No. Geno shouted "Sorry! But I really must be going, I have company, but we will meet soon, no doubt."

As "Her" and Rizon walked down the rest of the road towards Rizon's metropolitan apartment building. As soon as "Her" could no longer see Geno in her eyes, she stated "He's got an odd personality, if you know what I mean." Rizon chuckled, "Reading minds again? I thought you said you were cutting back on that?" "Her" smiled, "Did you actaully believe that, its kind of hard to, it becomes a habit, considering yours is like an open books, makes it easier for me." "You know, your pretty cruel sometimes." "I know!" She laughed and smiled back at him with wide eyes and a lightened face.

As Rizon took his key, and swiped it at the entrance door to the apartment building, "Her" bursted, "You live here!? Wow! I didn't know that, you must really work hard for this." "Indeed, I did.. I suppose it payed for itself in a way though.."

As "Her" entered the door of the Rizon's apartment, she looked out of his window to notice that he had a view of the complete metropolitan area where he resigned. "You have a nice view." she said with a smile. "Indeed I do, I know when everything is going on, I suppose." Said Rizon hesitently. Rizon began removing extra articles of clothing. His trench coat, and dark his glasses. "Can I get your coat, hun?" Asked Rizon with a blan look to his face. "Oh, thank you, Mr. Gentleman." "Her" chuckled as he took the jacket off of her.

"So, what do you want to do?" said "Her" .. "Well, Ill crack open the wine, and you make yourself comfortable on the couch, turn on the tv or something." "Okay!" stated "Her" They both sat on the couch, relaxing, telling jokes and laughing, drinking down their wine that they were both deeply enjoying.

"Her" began to smile at Rizon alot, he was kind of concerned in his own mind, but didn't think on it long, because he thought that "Her" would be reading him like an open book. She curled up very close to Rizon at a moments time, she smiled up at him and stated softly, "Sorry, Im abit cold." Rizon smiled down at her, "No problem at all." Time passed slowly.. More laughs and jokes as the TV shined brightley into their eyes, but they were to deep to notice.. The finished off the rest of the wine, and they were both tipsy, but they were both able to think well on their feet even while having a nights worth of drinking in them.

"Her" stated that she needed to be heading home, and that she was going to get a cab because she was tired, she kissed Rizon on the cheek as they walked down the stairs together, hurdling for warmth, but they were actaully cold for once. As Rizon watched her get in the car, he said goodbye to her as they hugged for a moment or two. "Her" stuck her head out the window just after the tires on the cab started rolling shouting, "Call me tommarow!" Rizon chuckled and shouted back "No problem, get some sleep, ya' drunk!" He heard "Her" burst out with laughter and shunt her head back into the cab.

Rizon ran up the stairs back up to his apartment, excited with a red face. Rizon and "Her" have never been that close before, but he enjoyed it, even if he was slightly intoxicated, for she was beautiful, funny, intelligent, and a mystery of her own, but he was interested in learning it even more than he had known for the past 3 years. Rizon fell on his bed, exhausted from his sprint up the stairs. He feel asleep shortly after, with a smile on his face, but with the TV still blaring and shining, but it didn't phase him what so ever, he was in a deep trance.
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