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Old 04-20-2008, 01:23 AM   #1
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I wrote this song when I was having troubles with another forum (not bemanistyle). The lyrics are deep, and the track is in production.

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[Verse 1]
I came in, friendly, peacefully
And U made a huge scene, bitchy, hit me
I have been brought down B4, not fun
But now, this ain't the same guy, hon
Pick Ur fights, wrong 4 rights
B prepared 4 an X-cruciating journey
Go on, boy, hit me
I will show how much you are a bitch 2 me

[CHORUS]
U cannot do nothin' 'cause I'm unstoppable
U cannot break me 'cause I'm unbreakable
U cannot move me 'cause I'm unmovable
U cannot do me 'cause I'm undoable
U cannot do me 'cause I'm undoable
U cannot sue me 'cause I'm unsueable
U cannot kick me 'cause I'm unkickable
U cannot hike me 'cause I'm unhikeable

[VERSE 2]
U think I'm lowly, I will go bitch on U
U don't even know, all the shit U'll go thru
If U try 2 stop me, U'll get beat thru
Cannot kick me, because I'm unkickable
Cannot bitch me, because I'm unbitchable
Cannot hit me, because, I'm unhitable
I'm not here 2 trick U, just 2 know U
I'm not here 2 bitch U, just 2 show U
I'm not here 2 shit U, just 2 go U
I'm not here 2 whore U, just 2 FUCK U

[CHORUS]
U cannot do nothin' 'cause I'm unstoppable
U cannot break me 'cause I'm unbreakable
U cannot move me 'cause I'm unmovable
U cannot do me 'cause I'm undoable
U cannot do me 'cause I'm undoable
U cannot sue me 'cause I'm unsueable
U cannot kick me 'cause I'm unkickable
U cannot hike me 'cause I'm unhikeable

[BRIDGE]
All of U are just shootin' blanks now
U ran out of ammunition, son of a bitch
U want to burn me, U can't, no flaming
Take my pride, my pain my dignity
I wanna rape Ur self-respect
And shoot the shit out of Ur mortality
But knowing me, I'll be invincible
So, come on, try and ban me.

[CHORUS]
U cannot do nothin' 'cause I'm unstoppable
U cannot break me 'cause I'm unbreakable
U cannot move me 'cause I'm unmovable
U cannot do me 'cause I'm undoable
U cannot do me 'cause I'm undoable
U cannot sue me 'cause I'm unsueable
U cannot kick me 'cause I'm unkickable
U cannot hike me 'cause I'm unhikeable

[CHORUS]
U cannot do nothin' 'cause I'm unstoppable
U cannot break me 'cause I'm unbreakable
U cannot move me 'cause I'm unmovable
U cannot do me 'cause I'm undoable
U cannot do me 'cause I'm undoable
U cannot sue me 'cause I'm unsueable
U cannot kick me 'cause I'm unkickable
U cannot hike me 'cause I'm unhikeable

[ENDING]
U good 4 nothin' bitch
U good 4 nothin' bitch
U good 4 nothin' bitch
U good 4 nothin' bitch
...
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- Love Makes The World Go Round / Madonna

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Old 04-20-2008, 06:22 PM   #2
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U isn't a word
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Old 04-20-2008, 07:49 PM   #3
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U isn't a word
What modern R&B artist actually spells out "you?" I kinda got my inspiration from "Son of a Gun (I becha think this song is about U)" by Janet Jackson.
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Old 04-21-2008, 05:21 PM   #4
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What modern R&B artist actually spells out "you?" I kinda got my inspiration from "Son of a Gun (I becha think this song is about U)" by Janet Jackson.
The question is what American citizen spells out the word "you?" In all honesty, people (here anyways) would take you a little more seriously if you didn't blatantly ignore basic English grammar and spelling rules. Maybe get firefox. it has a built in spellcheck, which could help you break this nasty little habit

also, is kike, or unkikeable a word? Half of that didn't make much sense. I would suggest not using as many expletives, as it's very to make yourself sound like a middle-schooler who just learned some naughty words, if you don't learn how to use them correctly. I don't mind the swearing, I could honestly care less, but it gets to the point where all intelligibility is lost when every other word is some derivative of 'bitch' or 'fuck'.
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Old 04-22-2008, 12:02 AM   #5
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kike is a derogatory term for a jewish person
kinda like chink for a chinese person or spic for a mexican person
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Old 04-22-2008, 12:11 AM   #6
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Im offended
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Old 04-22-2008, 12:12 AM   #7
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Yep. I am not offended by even though I am 1/4 Jewish...

EDIT: Changed lyrics just for The Chemist

But I was completely unaware it was a racial slur... I thought it was another name for a Jew.
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Old 04-22-2008, 11:25 AM   #8
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But I was completely unaware it was a racial slur... I thought it was another name for a Jew.
what?
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Old 04-22-2008, 12:39 PM   #9
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what?
Kike - Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia
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Old 04-22-2008, 12:50 PM   #10
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I merely borrowed the line from "They Don't Really Care About Us" by Michael Jackson, because it fit the beat, and it was catchy... Little did I know it was so impacting... But yeah, changed it so I don't get in trouble with the anti-defamation league...
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